Poetry of SlyM

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My Propsal to Pamela Münch -a record of the entire process of writing this poem.

Notes:
I don't need an answer right away.
I'd like you to think about this, because it could affect the rest of your life. It could BE the rest of your life.
Will you marry me?


Will you marry me? -See, be, free, thee, tree, extacy, reality
I love you with my heart, and I love you with my soul
Will you be mine? -fine, twine, entwine, define, stein, wine, klein
-before you, emplore, explore, bore, store, adore, restore, for

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I'm happy when I see you, and I'm happy when we meet

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I'm happy when I'm near you, more then writting could define.
I'm happy when I hear you, and when our two hands entwine     -combine?
I read this poem for you, in the hope that you will see
how completly I adore you, schatz, oh schnuggle-puppa-lee     -extacy?
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I'm glad when I can hear you,
I smile each time I hear you
...Schatz, you mean the world to me.
...Schatz, I love you endlessly.

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I love you when I hear you, more then writting could define     -devine?
I want to stay here near you, will you prommise to be mine?
It's clear that I adore you, and I go down on my knee, (then I)
I lay my life before you, {darling/meli/liebchen}, will you marry me?

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You make me feel that evrything is right (/fine)
when in your perfect presence I repose.
-suppose, toes, nose, chose, close, hose, those
when by your simply soothing side I sit /rest -best

perfect presence
simply soothing side
calming, completly comforting company

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*** mind, f-, bl-, b-, k-, d-, ref-, L-, h-, behind

when all the stars wash up in nite time's tide,
there's no place in the world I'd rather be
then snuggle by your simply soothing side.
the perfect presence, when you're close to me;
Completly comforting calm company
is what I think of as I fall asleep:
It is the fondest memory I keep.
-.....SAFE.... immage that I keep.
-X     "ritual" "Tradition"
It's just a nice tradition that I keep
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Is such a perfect immage that I keep,
and recolect each time I go to sleep.

Sleep, d-, cr-, st-, ch-, h-, r-, p-, k-, sh-, w
Side, h-, r-, d-, ch-, L-, pr-, t-, v-, w-, tr-, cr-, BRIDE

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It's what I {dream of / wish for/ long for} every single night;
While warm in bed, once I switched off the light.
-all warm in bed, when I-

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My life was once so empty, and alone (-my own)
and I was always looking for The girl
I spent it searching for the prefect girl
  -Girl, p-, wh-, c-, unc-, unf-, h-,
Whose life would match, and go well with my own
and some were prettysome had pretty hair, with braid and curl,
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Love, d-, glove, above, of,
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I hoped for love with each new girl I met.
But even when their hearts beat for my own,
Mine never joined theirs, making at duet.
-forget?

met, get, let, set, bet, forget, debt, jet, duet, vet, corvette, couplet

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For all my life, I've {wanted/waited} just to find
a girl to love; and one who'd love me too.
--------------; who'd love me, for her part.
Some girls were pretty, some were bright, some kind
but even those that loved me, for their part
got no true feeling from my lonely heart
-Heart, st-, f-, ch-, d-, art, sm-, t-, c-, ap-, p-, dep-,

a chance for a relationship to start
some love , so a relationship could start.
the Girl
- relationship, flirt, fling,
mrs. right.

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For many years I wished that I could find
a chance for a relationship to start.
Some girls had beauty, some were bright ,some kind
But even those that loved me, for their part,
Elicted no deep feelings in my heart.
There was none whome I wished to call my own,
So Sadly, I kept searching, all alone.

VERSE 2!!!
Then -:- Now -:- I Want...
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With you love is different;
No uncontrolled Madness;
Deeper than physical;
spiritual?
From beginning, I want to be certain;
don't get intimate, THEN see if it lasts;
don't try to bowl you over;
I wanted something more meaningful from you;

With you, from the beginning, things felt natural and right ->
- white, f-, bl-, s-, k-, n-, sl-, h-, m-, br-, t-, resp-, qu-, fl-,
more than the body's passion in the darkness of the night
You touched me far, far deeper; touched my being, and my soul ->
- Mole, t-, b-, d-, st-, r-, p-, contr-, sh-, par, c-, patr-,
The thought "We wouldn't work out" gave me such a dreadful fright,
The thoguht, "{it's nothing / not realy}" gave me such a fright
I slowed our closeness, checking it was right.
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With you my feelings played a different roll;
it wasn't passion burning in the night,
It was a closeness, calling to my soul.
The thought chance of losing that was such a fright
I had to wait 'till I was sure it's certain it was right,
Before I'd seal our closeness with Dared to offer you a kiss,
Or say "You are my love, my joy, my bliss."
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-kiss, bliss, this, miss
VERSE 3!!!!!!
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It hurts so much each time that we must part
I want to know you stay with me

It hurts so much, each time we seperate
I never want to leave you ..-..-..-..(stay)
-prey, displ-, dism-, str-,
So now I have a Question, for you
But one you needn't answer right away.
It's best to think much more than justfor longer than one day;
because it
It could even be the life you live. (-give)
It could forever change the way you live;
Your life, forever, could be what you give.

More like: offer? Consider? Tell...

-Late, g-, gr-, st-, d-, h-, f-, confisc-, sk-, m-, consum-, pl-, sl-, concentr-, considerate, debate, subjugate, perforate, conjugate, mutilate, mandat, communicate

-Stay, pl-, del-, dism-, uns-, b-, g-, h-, touché, l-, p-, r-, they, Fr-, gr-, pr-, spr-, str-, sl-, displ-, sw-,

!!! I have a question to communicate !!!
-and feeling that together we must stay
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Because it pains me when we separate,
Bacause I'm sure; with you I want to stay,
I've got a question to communicate,
But one you needn't answer right away.
It's best to think for longer than a day.
As it could change forever how you live;
Your life, forever, coulb be what you give.

VERSE 4!!!
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* * * REVISIONS * * * Last chorus: I love you and I fear you, for to me you are devine
-Beer, cheer, d-, f-, g-, p-, sear, t-, v-, w-, y-, sh-, cl-, sm-, sn-, sp-, st-, qu,

I love you and I fear you, for to me you are devine
I wish to stay here near you, will you promise to be mine?
I lay my life before you, and I go down on my knee,
Pamela! I emplore you, liebchen, will you marry me?

VERSE I:
When nighttime floods the heavens with it's tide
There's no place in the world I'd rather be
Than restinglaying by your simply soothing side,
That perfect presence, when you're close to me
Completly comforting, calm company
is what I dream of, long for, every night,
All warm in bed, when I turn off the light.

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REVISIONS on TYPING IT UP:

Chorus: I smile when I can hear you, ...entwine
I'm happy when I'm near you ... define
I read this poem TO you...

verse 2: for many years: for All MY years
Elicted no deep feelings: produced no magic feeling
There was none whome: There wasn't one

Verse 4: Ended too forcefully, even threateningly:
As it could change forever how you live;
Your life, forever, could be what you give. -BECOMES:
As it could change forever how WE live;
OUR LIVES, forever could be what WE give.

Last Chorus: and I go down on my knee: and go down upon my knee

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THE (intermediate) FINAL PRODUCT:

When nighttime floods the heavens with it's tide
  There's no place in the world I'd rather be
Than lying by your simply soothing side.
  That perfect presence, when you're close to me;
  Completely comforting, calm company,
Is what I dream of, long for, every night,
All warm in bed, when I turn off the light.

I smile when I can hear you, and when our two hands entwine.
I'm happy when I'm near you, more then writing could define.
I read this poem to you, in the hope that you will see
How completely I adore you, Schatz, oh Schnuggelpuppalie.

For all my years I wished that I could find
  A chance for a relationship to start.
Some girls had beauty, some were bright, some kind
  But even those that loved me, for their part
  Produced no magic feeling in my heart;
There wasn't one I wished to call my own,
So sadly, I kept searching, all alone.

I smile when I can hear you, and when our two hands entwine.
I'm happy when I'm near you, more then writing could define.
I read this poem to you, in the hope that you will see
How completely I adore you. Schatz, you mean the world to me.

With you my feelings played a different roll;
  It wasn't passion burning in the night,
It was a closeness, calling to my soul.
  The chance of losing that, was such a fright
  I had to wait 'till certain it was right
Before I dared to offer you a kiss,
Or say, "You are my love, my life, my bliss."

I smile when I can hear you, and when our two hands entwine.
I'm happy when I'm near you, more then writing could define.
I read this poem to you, in the hope that you will see
How completely I adore you, Schatz. I love you endlessly.

Because it pains me when we separate,
  Because I'm sure; With you I want to stay,
I've got a question to communicate
  But one you needn't answer right away.
  It's best to think for longer than a day.
As it could change forever how we live;
Our lives, forever, could be what we give.

I love you and I fear you, for to me you are divine.
I wish to stay here near you, will you promise to be mine?
I lay my life before you, and go down upon my knee,
Pamela, I implore you, Liebchen, will you marry me?

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FURTHER REVISIONS:

Verse 3: it wasn't passion burning: there wasn't desperate passion
it was a: there was a

Verse 1: When nighttime floods ALL HEAVEN with it's tide

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REVISIONS from WRITING IT OUT:

chorus: more THAN writing could define.
I read this poem FOR you,

Verse 2:
There wasn't one whose life meshed with my on -own, alone.
There wasn't one who made me less alone, -feel.
There wasn't one, from all (who/that) I have had known
who
That made me feel I wasn't more alnoe.
That made me truly feel no more alone.
That truly made me feel no more alone
That made my
-life feel
-deepest being less alone

heart/being/psyche/life/living heart/
-That made my dayly life seem less alone. -dayly inner
*: There was'nt one that I have ever known.

There wasn't one, from all who I have known
That made my inner life seem less alone.

Verse 4: because I'm sure: TOGETHER WE SHOULD stay

THEN: I changed my mind for much of the punctuation, again. I corrected the spelling errors. And I decided on the layout of the text.
Click here to see The End Product.